Pretty good story mate :) Certainly adds a bit of depth to the image. If I had to review, I'd say the descriptions of the actions could use a little tweaking maybe to emphasise some points and maybe edit out some relatively repetitive-sounding actions. Perhaps some lines about the giantess' and micro's thought processes could be a good addition, to help improve even further... The story is interesting and good, she still has one micro left, you gonna have another go to write about his fate maybe? :)
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